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life 1 min read 641 views Jun 17, 2016

Train

The thought of the strategically placed fixtures within the train cart intrigued her for she was infatuated with the crowded  seats and inhabited corners. She was moved with the swaying of the train and the uneasy movements that came with being unbalanced. Her imagination ran frantically, as she sought the secret morse codes of the electronic scripts that hinted at an uncharted destination. But, the ill-mannered facial expressions and gawking of the eyes, along with the contaminated notion of supposedly friendly gestures became that constant reminder of what she will spend the rest of her life running from. Stand clear of the closing doors please...

 

 

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Woven

Detailed description takes us into the heart of the train's inner workings, and inside the exciting, yet uncomfortable feel of being unbalanced. Intricate write, superb!

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danielleangie3

Thank you. I appreciate it!

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social seer

Is this "woman" described as inescapable object? Language and symbols expertly rendered.

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WarriorCarryingWater

Love it!

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danielleangie3

Yes @social seer, and thank you as well.

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danielleangie3

Thank you @nosajm 😊

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SMusinga

I want to thank you so much for writing this poem. You have no possible idea how much it really touched me. Really.. this is your best in my opinion.

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danielleangie3

Thank you for your kind compliment. I truly appreciate it.

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love_supreme

This story was told vividly. You can really feel this write.

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love_supreme

I like this poem.

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