miss_chaniel

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he poetically thrilled me

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life

Can he understand my ink
The way it's spilled on his body

His lips left indelible memory
Only a diary can read

The way his eyes hunt
my body like an canvas
an essential piece

A love letter being written with his fingers
His tongue enclosed His touch is like surprised wind
Only to end with penetrated chills

.........to end the night with poem he help create

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		kavindra says: I like this I would like to make a suggestion in the 3rd stanza second line take out the "s" in the word likes- and on the next line take out the word like all together--- so it would read like this " the way his eyes hunt my body like canvas an essential piece" it is of course always your choice how you wish it to be I just think if written this way it comes across as (your body is the canvas of his master piece ) poems by this commentor Graduate written word Eyes Of a child
		Miss_chaniel says: I'll take note of that thanks for reading poems by this commentor Dear dreams writing out my pain What haunts me
		The Immortal Wize says: I like it a lot. poems by this commentor Plain It Goes Without Saying Guilt Ridden
		RobinJPFTS says: Very nice! poems by this commentor You Freakin on me Freedom Happy Anniversay