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just different 1 min read 672 views Dec 4, 2014

Shopping LInes

holiday traffic

crazy people

trying to get somewhere

forgetting their caution

beware of the holiday driver

their mind is not on the road

 

shopping during the holiday season

dealing with crazyness

people on a shopping mission

to get the perfect gift

 

the lines are long

and the cashiers are few

waiting four hours

I was thirsty

and had to pee too

 

forgetting about the closing time

leaving to get a drink

I lost my place in line

my purchase

would have to wait too

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I refuse to participate anymore in the collective madness you've described so well in this piece!

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